Your Book for Week-end Dominion Part 3

Pros

The author gives us an inside look at what is a believable life in a day of a hobo. His thoughts, his actions, and perhaps what may even have led to the current state of his life.

Once a character is introduced into the story, that person isn’t left ‘hanging’ as the story progresses. The storyline refers back to him or her regularly so you don’t wonder where they come from when they show up unexpectedly – such as when a set of fraternal twins that Paul meets a few chapters back show up on the roof of the castle helping to clean up a mess after a lightning strike.

The storyline moves at a quick pace and is loaded with action sequences to keep the reader wondering where the storyline will go next, or in what time period.

Cons

Thought the storyline moves quick, it is erratic. The plot jumps significantly from place to place and time period to time period. Traveling in time isn’t necessarily a bad subject, but to use it without building a premise for it leaves the reader at a loss until some sort of reference points are established to ground the character in the new timeline. But in some instances, those reference points do not arrive.

There are significant proofreading errors throughout the book in spelling, grammar, and outright incorrect words inserted in odd places. To two of these issues, we bring your attention to page 148, third paragraph. “He was lying right on ground in the month of a shallow cave, a very different cave from.” This is one of several typos. Some are as obvious as this one, others are more subtle with only a letter missing. Yet others are just incorrect words. A proofreader checking over the typesetting would have been a big help.

This ties into the last issue, and centers on the proofreading. Since many of the spelling issues actually create real words, the story occasionally grinds to a halt each time they occur while you read the passage again to determine what the sentence should have been, or at the very least, what the meaning of the sentence was.

The story jumps haphazardly between time periods, modern-day during one part of a paragraph, and then into the medieval period as the next one starts; all with relatively little or no transition. There are so many jumps that it is easy to get lost wondering where the current passage takes place – or when.

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